Saturday, November 24, 2012

Rhyming Narratives

This week we were inspired by Mrs Blackmore's book 'The Lawrence Lions' as well as a variety of the Kiwi Corkers series, where narratives have been written in rhyming verse.  So we were randomly paired (using a pack of cards) and given the challenge to write our own version of a known fairy tale or known story.  It was ALOT harder than we thought it would be and we all soon realised how important it is to choose the most appropriate word to end each first line.  Here's what we came up with...


Alice in Wonderland
A little girl named Alice fell in a hole,
And found an ugly looking mole.
She looked around, she was in a wonderland,
Beautiful music was coming from a band.

She saw a tea party down the road,
And a rabbit carrying a heavy load.
Their manners were bad but they didn't seem to matter,
Because all the delish food was spread out on a platter.

Alice was hungry, she wanted some food,
But their manners were too rude.
Finally they offered her a scone – cheese,
Then she was very pleased.

She fell down to the ground,
Everyone gathered around.
The animals knew it was poisonous, it was their trick,
She was going to wake up so they ran away quick.

Written by Jessica and Rubie

Inspired by The Moa Cave
Tyler and Hine got stuck in a cave,
Trying not to worry and be very brave.
Looking at the next Mopsi was there,
But where was Hopi?  He was nowhere.

On the second day in the tattered old den,
Hine was searching and found a new friend.
But sadly it was bones covered in dust,
Somehow Hine knew she could trust.

The greenstone pendant lay amongst the bones,
But the skeleton was laying on the gizzard stones.
They tried to get out with all their might,
But then suddenly gave up the fight.

6 years later they were still in the cave,
Lying by Ata in their very own grave!!!!
They were never forgotten by their good friend Mandy,
But where they were lying it was a little sandy.

One day up at Woolshed Bay,
A tourist came travelling to say Gidday.
“You’ll never guess what I just found,
Under this great big mound....”

Written by Lucy W and Jay

Jack and the Beanstalk
One hot summers day a little brave boy,
Brought some beans off a man called Poy.
Mum came back from work and looks in disgrace,
With a very angry look on her face.

“Why, why did you sell our very own horse for these silly things?
I’d rather have some diamond rings.”
She throws the beans out the window and sent him to bed,
Without knowing what lies ahead.

He wakes up at dawn and gets a big fright,
Climbs up the stalk with all his might.
He pops his head out through the cloud,
Then he begins to scream out loud.

He saw a house of candy and gum,
Wouldn’t it be great if it was all in his tum.
He knocks on the door and gets no reply,
There in the window is a green beady eye.

His stomach rumbled all over the place,
He couldn’t stand not to have a taste.
He saw something coming and thought it was a witch ,
But it turns out it was a big snitch.

He runs to the stalk and slides right down
Sees his mum with a great big frown.

The snitch followed him down the stalk,
And went to his mum for a little talk.
He got in trouble for running away,
He promised Mum he would always stay.

Written by Alex and Paris

The Three Little Pigs
The three little pigs were running away,
They thought they could have a little play.
On and on they went until they came to a stream,
One caught a fish that looked supreme.

They built a fire to cook the fish,
It was a really delicious dish.
After building a bridge of sticks,
They made a house out of bricks.

The next day on their way to the city bay
They saw a wolf that looked like he needed paid.

The wolf saw the pigs and thought they would look,
Like they really needed cooked.
So that was the end for the little pigs,
So a grave Mr Wolf had to dig.

Written by William and Max

Little Red Riding Hood
Little Red Riding Hood was on her way,
To her Grandmas house on a very hot day.
As she was skipping through the woods,
Out jumped a big bad wolf called: POOD POODS!

She was carrying bacon and a bottle of spray,
She sprayed the wolfs eyes and ran away.
She reached Grandmas house and rang the doorbell,
The wolf was in the house and thought: Oh hell!

He threw on a mask and Grandma’s clothes,
He said “Come in dear and.. hello!”
She opened the door and could not believe her eyes,
Grandma was there, what a surprise!

She looked at Grannies hands with big fat claws,
Turned around and ran to the door.
It was .... Pood Poods!
So she ran fast back into the woods.
She ran back home and said “Phewf!
I’m not going back in there, I’ll get caught by another wolf!”

Written by Mac & Venessa

The Three Little Pigs
The three little pigs were on their way,
To go the river to have a play.
The oldest one lay down for a nap,
While the other two go on the new ipad app.

Then the big bad wolf comes out from his bush,
Grabs the littlest pig and goes off in a woosh.
The other two pigs could not believe their eyes,
They kept on gazing in surprise.

They were going to the zoo to visit the camels,
And all the other awesome mammals.
As they go get in the car,
They heard a big creak and in came a man from the bar.

Their mother roared up the engine before he got in,
The littlest pig threw him in the bin.
They never got to the zoo,
Them and their mother cried “Boo hoo”.

Written by Abby and Emma

Inspired by The Moa Cave
Tyler and Hine set off for their cave,
Overnight there was a massive wave.
That ginormous wave blocked the only way out,
They had to try really hard not to pout.

They searched and searched in the den,
Finally found a way out of the pen.
They were very happy to see broad daylight,
Although it kinda hurt their sight.

They got in a fight with two big beasts,
They finally gave in so they didn’t become a feast.
Tyler showed them some ancient treasure,
For Grunty and Shifty it was a great pleasure.

Tyler and Hine finished their dare,
With a kiss for each other, more than fair.
When they reached the bay they tried not to sway,
For their legs were wobblier than a horse on a stack of hay.

Mandy was happy to see her two great friends,
After they’d been on a road with too many bends.
Cold and frightened they went back to Woolshed Bay,
Meanwhile in the cave their old friend Ata lay.

With goodbyes for each other they set off back home,
Hoping next time they wouldn’t see each other with moa bones.
The next year the cave opened as a museum,
So Mandy brought her best friend Em.

Mandy, Tyler and Hine remained great mates
Although the following year they didn’t have as much on their plates
They always remembered Ata in the cave
Also the time when they had to be brave.

Written by Lucie and Rylee


The Three Little Pigs
Three little pigs lived in a small house,
Wasn’t even enough room for a mouse.
Mother pig said “It’s time you pigs went away”
The first little pig built a house of hay.

The second little pig built himself a house of sticks,
And the third little pig built a house of bricks.
A wolf came sneaking behind the house of hay,
The first little pig said “Oh please go away.”

Breathing through his nostrils the wolf blew the house down,
So the first little pig went screaming through the town.
The wolf found the second little pig home alone,
He went charging and doing a big moan.

“Let me in you silly thing”
The second little pig was so worried he broke his ring.

When suddenly he heard – karate kick,
It was his mother, then he saw some ick.
So he said “Throw him into the ick”.  Splat! 
Then the wolf was bitten by a cat.

Written by Toby and Kurt

Inspired by The Moa Cave
While at the beach Tyler and Hine explored a cave,
They found Ata lying in his grave.
His bones were covered in dust and dirt,
He didn’t even have a shirt.

Along came a big wave ,
And blocked their way out of the cave.
Tyler tried to do it his way,
Hit a wave but still breathing again.

Tyler finally made it out to tell the others,
“Quick go and get Hine’s brothers”.
Finally they rescued Hine too,
They all checked if she was ok and she said “Phew.”

Written by Regen and Blake


Jack and the Beanstalk
Jack was in a running race,
His cow was keeping up the pace.
He dropped to the ground and looked around,
He couldn’t believe what he had found.

There on the ground right beside him,
Were some beans that looked delightning.
He shoved them into his pocket with delight,
And took off with a fright.

While he was running round and round,
The beans dropped onto the ground.
They grew and grew up so high,
He couldn’t believe they touched the sky.

Jack scrambled up the stalk,
And whipped out a lovely fork.
He looked up with his eyes,
And saw a surprise.

There on the hill a house of straw,
A wolf that was coming out that he saw.
The cow saw the wolf, the wolf saw the cow,
The wolf took off with a little howl.

The first little pig made a sound,
Heard something then turned around.
There he saw Jack with his cow,
Also saw that the wolf had taken off with a howl.

All the pigs gathered around,
And weighed 200 pound.
The pigs gave a little talk,
And looked up at the stalk.

Jack explained how he got here,
While he was eating a pear.
The wolf came back in despair,
He was fiddling with his ear.

Jack looked at poo,
And took off with a “hoo”
Then he came to his house,
And jumped into bed as quiet as a mouse.

Written by Connie and George

The Three Little Pigs
The three little pigs were running away,
They thought they could have a little play.
On and on they went until they came to a stream,
They lay down for a nap and they had a dream.

When they woke up they found all the food was gone,
Except for one little scone!
Then they set off to find the food,
And the three little pigs were in a very angry mood.

The three little angry pigs thought and thought where all the food had disappeared to,
Then they went home and found their mother had the flu.
So the oldest pig gave their mother a dose of drugs,
And they also gave her a couple of hugs.

Written by Kate and Lucy S

Inspired by The Moa Cave
Tyler and Hine found a cave,
Where Ata was lying in his grave.
There they saw a moa bone,
With that bone they got a loan.

With that money they got a boat,
They hoped and hoped it stayed afloat.
But very soon they came to think,
That it will surely sink.

They saw a tank had floated by,
And the people on it said “Hi.”
They all needed to be saved,
And they never forgot the day they were brave.

Written by Jenaya and Hamish

1 comment:

  1. WOW room 4 great rhyming storys i like them.
    lucie

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