Writing using electronic devices!!!!!

Check out the writing in Room 4 today.  Every student was working on the same document at the same time!  Most of us were using iPads, but some students were also working on computers in the classroom.  We have been learning to write a variety of different sentence types and today we were working on improving some basic sentences written about the snow earlier in the week.  Not only were we able to add our own suggestions to the Google Doc but we could get ideas from other students and give and receive feedback about what we were writing - collaboration at it's best!  Best of all for Mrs O, no books to cart home to mark!

"I didn't like how there was a whole lot people writing and sometimes your work got crossed out" - Toby.

"I didn't like it with everybody writing on the same page because it was easy to get mixed up with everybody elses" - Isla

"I liked how everybody's sentences were different" - Anna

"I liked getting inspiration from other people's sentences - not copying them but getting ideas" - Josie

"It was good how everybody had different colours so you could not write over the top of other people" - Lanie

"I like how I can see all of your work on one page and not have to carry a big stack of books home to mark!" - Mrs O

Here are some examples of our improved sentences....

Snowflakes fell to the ground.

Snowflakes fell to the ground, while children scooped the snow up and threw them at each other. (Lanie)

Snowflakes fell, sprinkling like pixie dust, to the ground. (Bryce)
While the children slept, millions of snow flakes fell to the ground. (Alyssa)

Cars were skidding out of control.

Skidding out of control,cars were trying to make their way to work along slushy roads.(Josie)

Cars,covered in white thick snow,were skidding out of control. (Alyssa)

Cars were skidding out of control like they were ice-skating (Regan)

Cars, skidding out of control, were struggling to drive along the frozen road.(Isla) 
Cars were skidding out of control because the snow was so slippery. People couldn’t get to work. (William)

Tree branches were covered with snow.   

Trees were covered with a thick white blanket. (Samara)

Tree branches, looking white as angels, were covered with snow.(Josie)

Children were throwing snowballs.

Children were all hyped up, ready to play with the snow, making snow balls and snowmen.(Ryan)

Children were throwing snowballs at their brothers and sisters. (Tearoha)

Children were throwing snowballs at each other and having the best time ever. (Anna)

While children were fighting with snowballs, their parents were sitting by the fire and drinking coffee.(Josie)   

Schools were closed.

The snow was as thick as sea level so school was closed. (ALESANA!)

Schools were closed until the snow melted. (Toby)

School was closed because it was cold. (Imogen)

The schools were closed until the roads and grass cleared up. (Ryan)

Which is your favourite sentence?